''You know what Ira, I just want the time to stop. I want to freeze this moment. I just want to lie like this with you, forever.''
''Forever?''. She giggled.
''Yes, forever. Why? You dont want to?''
''Paas aaeeye ke hum nahi aayenge baar baar...
bahe gale mein daal ke, hum ro le zaar zaar...''
''You know, you pass on your message so subtly. It hurts!''
''Do you have light?''
''I dont like when you smoke. Why can you smoke and I cannot?''
''Because I am elder to you and you've got to listen to me.''
''Fuck you!''
Smoking, looking at the dark sky with twinkling stars and lying with that one guy she loved. Ah! Life couldnt have been better. She too wanted to lie like this with him, FOREVER....
Ira met Vikram two years back, when Vikram's family moved into the city. Vikram needed a math tutor, and who better than Ira! She was the best math professor in the city. But she did not prefer giving tutions. But when Vikram approached her, she couldnt refuse. He was young, charming and charismatic. He had her at 'hello'.
They started with the math lessons, everyday, two hours.
He liked her company and so did she. Soon they started spending more time with each other, more than those two hours. Chatting, talking about things in general, politics, novels, philosophy, news, music, art et cetra. They grew fond of each other, came really close to each other. More importantly, understood each other.
''Ira, can I ask you a question?''
''Yea! Sure! Go on..!''
''Where is your husband? I mean I never saw him!''
''You sure didnt, because I dont have any husband.''
''What!! You never got married? Why?''
''Umm..because I never found my man. I had many men in my life, but none worth marrying'', she smiled.
''Yeah, I know. Ira, why do you smoke?''
''You ask too many questions!''
Thunder! Clouds clashed! It started raining. Raining heavily.
''Oh! How much I love rains!! Do you want to go up to the terrace?'' Ira asked Vikram.
''Yeah! I don’t mind. Infact I would love to!!''
Like kids they ran upstairs, opened the terrace door, and then…woohooo!
''I love! I love!! I absolutely love getting drenched in rain!!'' Ira exclaimed.
''And I love seeing you getting drenched in rain..'' Vikram told her, holding her around her waist.
Peals of laughter followed by moments that none could ever forget. Ever!
''Lag ja gale ke phir yeh haseen raat ho naa ho...shayad is janam mein phir mulakat ho na ho...''
Lying there, with a cigarette in hand, smoking, memories came rushing back to her. It has been 9 years now. She looked up at the dark sky, twinkling stars, slight breeze brushing through her face. Everything was just the same, except that she was lying there alone.
She had a card with her, a wedding invitation.
VIKRAM WEDS PRIYA.
WE HUMBLY SOLICIT YOUR GRACIOUS PRESENCE....
Crushing hopes, teardrop in her eye. She knew this would come, she always knew. But it hurt her this time, crushed her insides this time because she found her man and lost him. And what was the hardest was that she won’t find him again.
''Shayad phir is janam mein mulakat ho na ho...''
Stared back at the dark sky, smoked again.
PS: My first fictional story.
19 comments:
wow! this is really good..I have met a character like Ira, except that she isnt a teacher, and she smokes like a chimney..
Good one Neha!!! I like the flow :)
@ Pavan
Thanks! I hope you dont smoke like a 'chimney'. Two very important people in my life do. Idiots!
@ The Rain Crab
Thanks a lot! Great that you liked it. Its my first time in fictional writing. Was so not sure about posting this one!
Quite explicit.
I like!
me? well basically I am a non-smoker, exception - If I am under immense pressure or I am really drunk, I smoke secretly!!
and btw, you should write more fictional stuff, cuz i think you'r good at it..
@ Anurag
Look who commented!!!!! :-D
Thankies! A lot!
@ Pavan
So you do smoke..'occassionally'!! As long as you know what you are doing its not wrong I guess. Thats why I, unlike many others dont make a fuss with people who smoke! I mean c'mon...they are adults and they know the pros and cons of smoking. They know what they are doing, so let them do. :-p
And thanks a lot that you liked my story, I was soooo apprehensive about it!!! :-)
Will sure try to write more.
very cute feelings..
she got it in hand and missed him.. (just like me did!)
smoking is very nice at times - rainy..
nice flow.. though could not translate those hindi verses..
(pls do!)
Hm..even though I'm an occasional smoker, I hate people who smoke regularly just because they can or they get a chance. My uncle for instance, he smokes non stop, even when driving! he can finish a 20 pack like in minutes..anyways, lol..
i can see a short film out of this!
@ Arvind
Thank you.
@ Pavan
Your uncle can be my dad's best friend! :-p
And bingo dude! Short film was what I had in mind when I wrote the story :-)
lolz..yeah that would be good, a short film..or even like a music video or something..just wondering, would you prefer to write in a notebook or computer when you'r writing something creative..
@ Pavan
Well its a notebook anyday! Anyday!!! :-)
Wow !!!! very very close to comfort .... but amazing none the less ... i cant share much over such a open forum but believe me this is too close to comfort .... it pinches the way its supposed to it leaves room for subtle endings one would like ....
tell me did u rite it in one go ???
@ Nutees
Omg!!!! Look who is back!!!! Its awesome to see your comment after such a lonng time!
Thanks, and yeah I wrote it in one go, like just wrote down what I could just imagine :-)
My writing has changed sooo much over the years!! :-)
Btw, I hope you'll be more regular now. Dying to read your work!
its always good to be back . i love this story so much that i have it saved now ... as i sad u are high on change gal ... calm down change is like the cigarette in ur post ... it gives a sense of excitement and then makes u addicted to it ... i must say i am an addict ... but over the time i have realized that as one grows i think one also needs to come to terms with some of the constants in life or so i m told .... u said sumthing about leaving sofia ?? u done with college ??
Beautiful...
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